To everyone’s surprise—especially Mack’s—Jayanti prevailed in the Pit and KOed Mackenzie. Now, as promised, she gets the youngster as a sex slave, and she’s taking the entire “slave” thing to a whole new level!
Plunging into the Depths, Part 2
To everyone’s surprise—especially Mack’s—Jayanti prevailed in the Pit and KOed Mackenzie. Now, as promised, she gets the youngster as a sex slave, and she’s taking the entire “slave” thing to a whole new level!
Great story.
Imagine a team sexfight with Jayanti and mackenzie toghether and loser team pass a night like sex slave in this jayanti room ^^.
Brad collect G string maybe Jayanti start a collection of sex slave ahah ^^. The rise of Jayanti ^^. But the fall of Jayanti in her own sex slave room will be great too ^^.
Jayanti vs. Prudence with the loser going to the dungeon afterwards. That should be hella hot.
Ahah with Mackenzie as assistant to the winner ^^.
Regine and Cindy fight and bet a night sex slave in the dungeon for the loser, if Regine win, Jayanti join her, if Cindy win, Manik join her ^^.
Next step for Mackenzie lose a bet with nipples piercing ahah ^^. (but ofc this can be an other girl, we need a girl with nipples piercing in this world, not easy for fight but can be hot and fun ^^).
Great, just another reason to hate this story, all the ideas it’s spawning.
Of course don’t get me wrong, I’m NOT here to kink shame anyone, if bondage is your thing, then that’s okay.
You do you.
But it isn’t my thing, not really, although I will admit I’ve seen some where it was done tastefully.
And I know that Entropy and Sherlock don’t take every single suggestion seriously.
But I do feel like I should remind everyone that these websites aren’t normally about bondage.
While I do agree that it seems unfair to see Mack on the constant side of being “dumped” on. This story was one of the hottest ones I have ever seen on the site. And no it wasn’t because of Mack being Jayanti’s sex slave.
I felt this one shed some light into Jayanti’s past she’s made it clear in the past. That she’s not Manik’s girlfriend nor does she want to marry him several times. Notice how Jayanti mentioned that they are in Canada, and that she won’t marry Manik over a promise.
In Canada same sex marriage is legal and I think there’s a reason she’s repeled by Manik. At her core I think she is only attracted to women I believe her one on one with Mack. Has in a way opened that door for her to leave Manik behind in her past. Maybe Jayanti has deveolped an attraction toward Mack now?
By the end Mack’s pride is destroyed and even she has admitted in her thoughts. That Tania her prior girlfriend never made her cum as much as Jayanti has made her. Which means Jayanti is a worthy successor as a future lover for her. I would love to see a dream sequence with Jayanti and Mack in the near future. Where Jayanti has a fantasy dreaming about Mack going from sex slave to lover. Maybe even toy with the idea that Jayanti in the dream picturing Mack as a possible wife?
Well, I really liked it.
Frankly, this is the kind of stuff I miss from no longer having a dedicated BSF site…the chance to to experiment and try different things and get way from the usual structure of a fight/conflict.
I, personally, enjoy domme/sub dynamics (not necessarily BDSM….it doesn’t bother me, but I don’t need the trappings of toys and leather, etc), and I feel like this adds an interesting and novel layer to Jayanti as a character with these hidden depths.
I like her story of coming from a high status family and a more repressed background, and now having all this freedom she’s unwilling to give up. I feel like this also clarifies some of her motivation beyond Manik and their relationship; that she prizes her freedom, particularly as a dominant person who sees marriage as a submission, but still feels ownership over Manik, and thus sees it as submission to lose him to someone else.
Basically, he’s more like a pet to her than anything.
This was a very neat story…I enjoyed it greatly!
In response to ForeShadow:
I see what you are saying and agree with you.
But why, why, WHY!!! Does it have to be Mackenzie that gets thrown into the slaughter? When there are other women (and men) that could have taken her place.
Again I ask…
Who else in this league was forced to get a “Hello Titty” Tattoo?
Who else in this league will get to be treated as Jayanti Sex Slave?
The answer to both questions is…NOBODY.
And while I see Entropy saying “But this isn’t me saying things will stay like this; Mack won’t be like Meg in Family Guy”.
I personally find that a little hard to believe considering how long this has been going on.
Almost every time I read a Mackenzie story I find myself saying, “It’s getting harder and harder to be a Mackenzie fan”.
And honestly I would rather see Mackenzie get kicked out of the league and disappear into obscurity like so many other women before her, than to see her go through another debasing thing like this again.
Seriously, just pull the trigger already and put her out of her misery.
Again, I understand that Entropy and Sherlock don’t owe me anything just because I’m a fan, but again I just can’t stay silent any longer.
I don’t know what to tell you, guy.
It is the nature of story for characters to struggle. An author doesn’t hate a character because they give them struggle…that’s how they LOVE them.
MacKenzie is endearing to me because she struggles but never quits; that’s what heroes do. The thankless job of struggling and enduring. If Entropy didn’t like her as a character he’s just say that she was weak of will and have her quit.
Instead…she endures.
That’s what heroes do.
In response to ForeShadow:
True, very true
However, even after hitting rock bottom, the hero does eventually get back up and win, that’s what make their story so compelling
All I’m asking for is a little more balance between winning and losing, which most of the Basement women seem to have.
I’d love to have a story commission
But I do see where random_guy is coming from though.
Seeing a favorite get shit crapped on constantly gets irritating.
First, not real interested in outright torture
Second, has that stuff been in Jayanti’s basement all along? 🙂
I guess. But we’ve never seen Jay’s home or basement, so what’s the surprise? Maybe Manik gets whipped on the side? Or maybe she is too busy keeping him on a leash to really be herself with him?
I would neve have asked for this story, but I enjoyed it. I always expected Jay to dominate Manik in some way, maybe like this or worse. I would not have been surprised if Jay took over Manik’s Hotel and made Manik her prisoner in her Hotel. Another thought would be they do marry and Manik becomes her abused husband
I think it would be more fun the other way around; they get married, and Manik dominates Jay, with the contents of her own dungeon!
But as far as Mackenzie being your top 3, yeah it is a little hard to believe since she HAS been Meg from Family Guy for the last 10 years.
I mean if you want to study “what defeat does to a strong, powerful and proud woman” try forcing Caribe to get a “Hello Titty” Tattoo, or let Kim suffer a 10 year losing streak, or make Jennifer become Jayanti’s sex slave.
All I’m saying is you have 14 female fighters you can evenly spread out the shit, so you don’t need to dump it all on Mackenzie.
And I just remembered another terrible thing that happened to Mackenzie, even when she was the BWL Champion, she wasn’t the official champion but just the “Interim champion”, which to me simply felt like you were telling her…
“Sorry Mack, you’re not good enough to be the REAL champion so here’s one of those fake plastic title belts you get at a toy store for you to hold on to while the REAL champion is resting.”
Bottom line Mackenzie deserve better.
And you forget that, after she finally got new breasts, I made Prudie destroy them. In French, we have a saying: Qui aime bien châtie bien (Who loves well chastises well, literally).
No, I did mentioned that in my first rant, it’s towards the end of it.
In regards to your French saying:
If that’s the case, then love Mackenzie a little less.
THIS NEEDS TO STOP!!!
This obsessive need to SHIT on Mackenzie NEEDS…TO…STOP!!!
First off let me clarify something, I’m not insane I know that Mackenzie is just a fictional character.
I know that this is just a fictional story.
I understand that there are overarching story lines that crisscross with each other and keeping them in order is a difficult task.
And I also understand that this was a commission and if people want to pay to see Mackenzie get dumped on, that’s fine, shell out your hard earned money for what you want to see.
But I’ve been a fan of this character ever since she was first introduced and when she was the first to win the Sexfighting title, that’s when I decided to signed up for these sites and become a long time member.
I’ve even gone so far as to create a fan blog, BWL/BSF Report on Tumblr, which has been taken down, but replaced with a bdsmlr blog and a Twitter account of the same name.
But ever since Mackenzie first “stumbled” when she lost her first league match, she hasn’t been able to recover, not fully, and that was more or less 10 years ago.
While other characters, like France, who have hit rock bottom, have managed to climb back up in more or less 2 years.
But as far Mackenzie goes, there’s just SHIT after SHIT that gets dumped on her so much more harder than any other character, I mean who else was forced to get a “Hello Titty” Tattoo? Who else will get THIS kind of treatment Jayanti?
And yeah, I may be a bit guilty of this too because when I made my commission for the Tandem Sexfights, she and Mel lost the final match, but at least I wrote it so that she at least got second place.
And simply put that’s all I want, don’t make Mackenzie into Super Woman, but at least give her a decent winning streak every once in a while and don’t give me that “She still a rookie” crap, cause like I said before, it’s been 10 years now, I THINK that new car shine has worn off by now.
I’ve kept quiet about this for a long time now, mostly because I thought “Entropy and Sherlock must have something big cooking up” and I would wait for some big pay off to come, but NOTHING ever did.
Except for a few brief moments that quickly went away the next time we saw Mackenzie, like that one scene in Matrix Revolutions where Neo and Trinity (mostly Trinity) saw sunlight for the first time then quickly fell back to their dark world.
And like I said before, I have a bdsmlr blog and a Twitter account and currently I’m doing a retrospective on the Sexfighting title and I’ve noticed that in the 10 years that title has existed, Mackenzie has never really had a FAIR chance at reclaiming that title.
I mean sure she has challenged David for it, but we all know he was cheating at the time and then there was that time when she challenged Kim, but Prudence stole that from her as well as wreaking her first boob job.
Look, I understand that Entropy and Sherlock don’t owe me or anyone else anything just because we are fans, but after reading through this latest edition of “LET’S DUMP SOME MORE SHIT ON MACKENZIE”, I just had this strong urge to break my silence and address this issue.
Now you know how I as a Louise fan feel
The obvious answer to that rant would be to pay for your own commission and give Entropy freedom to publish it instead of complaining about someone else’s.
Hey, man. I never censor any comment so I take the good AND the bad. Random Guy is a fan and U know his “rant” only shows how much he cares about my stories and especially about Mack. And maybe it’s hard to believe, but Mack is among my Top 3 on this site! Maybe this is why I “mistreat” her like this; she’s got the backstory and the complexity to allow for a real study of what defeat does to a strong, powerful and proud woman. But this isn’t me saying things will stay like this; Mack won’t be like Meg in Family Guy.
In response to Entropy:
I thank you for not taking my complaint too personal and you’re right, I am a fan and I do care about this world you have build as well as the character that live in it and that includes Mackenzie.
In response to K:
Clearly you missed the part of my “rant” where I mentioned that I did pay my own commission. So I ask, What is the point of paying another commission to build up Mackenzie confidence if someone else will just come along and undo it?
Either commissions are not canon and what Entropy releases as canon. Maybe tags as Canon/not-canon.
I would tag it if it weren’t canon. In this case, I thought it was a cool story for Mack and Jay. I wouldn’t have done it if it were me, but I liked the idea. Sometimes, it,s cool to get pused toward paths I wouldn’t have taken after 18 years of doing this…